The view was astounding it was even better in the
driver’s seat. We kept staring and talking about it until we started hearing
some roar. It kept coming time to time. Though the roars were mysteriously
eerie; we got engrossed in the foot tapping music by Abba that played on the
radio. Having fun and singing along we were in our own world. When out of the
blue we heard a loud “RROOOAAR!” which really stopped everything. Everyone
including me looked around when suddenly I saw a white storm or no it was an
avalanche!!!!!!!! It was lucky we were quite a distance away!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Fabulous effort, Eera,
ReplyDeleteI am able to imagine the scene from the vivid description that you have written.
Try not to over use the exclamation mark!!!!!
Super work.
Mrs T.
Thats really good Eera!
ReplyDeleteThank you Driti.
ReplyDeleteMrs T.
Hello Eera - what a fantastic 100wc! It contains some lovely language, well-structured sentences and a good variety of well-used punctuation (although I agree with Mrs T that you should ease off the exclamation marks).
ReplyDeleteMr Kenyon (Team 100wc)
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