Trapped ?
The night had come and with it a sense
of loneliness. This was the fifth time I had tried to escape and all
I did was go in circle, leading me nowhere near freedom. By now I was beginning to lose my patience and my potential. I decided to
try one more time and if I did not succeed I would have to do the
unthinkable. Just as the temptation of giving up was rising ...
... there they were, SOME STAIRS. '' I am saved ,''I whispered to myself still gasping
for air ...
I found the phrase 'to lose my patience and potential' very powerful; I wish that I could find out what was going on...
ReplyDeleteSuper work, Ruvarashe
This is a very dramatic piece of writing and very mature. There are some powerful sentences in there such as 'the night had come and with it a sense of loneliness". I find this quite emotive. Also, you've used some good grammar to help build up the suspense and drive the story forward.
ReplyDeleteWell done