Enchanted Steps
Lost. I was simply
lost. My map was blurred by the
uninterrupted rain which was like a downpour of tears, - the feeling of being
vanquished bothered me- I was looking at a path which split into two ways with
steps surrounded by green grass and tall trees. Being a detective and chasing
gangsters was my job. A gangster name McKing was secretly hiding in this forest
in Belgium. My eye caught the light of a lantern! However there wasn’t anyone
holding it. Attracted by the lantern, I took a path and ascended the steps,
unaware of what lay ahead.
Wow, this is a great beginning to a possibly longer story. Your writing hooked me right from the start, with interesting ideas and vocabulary. You left me wondering what might happen next.
ReplyDeleteA really great piece of writing, very well done.
I agree with Anonymous, your choice of vocabulary is brilliant and the story has such potential.
ReplyDeleteWell done, Ishita
Wow Ishita, well done!!!!!!!!!!You got into the week no.22 list.I mean the showcase!
ReplyDeleteI agree..your story is totally brilliant! Congratulations!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you!!
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